Today we edited the rough cut according to the feedback we got last friday.
*shortened the music with appropriate fading.
*made the titles shorter and layed them over the shots to shorten the piece and to make it look better.
*we've started adding graphics and movement to the titles to stop them feeling so static.
*we've also cut the second writing scene and instead made a montage of shots to substitute so that the pace of the piece isn't lost.